Writing Task #8

Matriculation exams have always been an integral part of a regular high-school student's life. During the 3 years of high-school each student takes part of several exams in different subjects. Those tests are known for their cruelty and being treated as life changers. As a student who's taking part in these exams I am going to write whether those exams are reliable or not.

First of all, I would have to mention the fact that those tests are given a way bigger credit than they can hold. The fact that each year there appears to be a different level of difficulty on the same subject pisses me off. The whole point of the bagrut exams is to have a unit of measure and comparison between the students. In reality, it's not that simple. The fact that each year the difficultry changes can result way lower grades on one group of students and way higher grades on other group of older or younger students. That means that in the future, those younger or older students which got lucky to recieve a much easier test have a leverage on me later in life (university).

Second issue I want to attend to concerns the copyinh between students in the exams. Lost of it.

In times where the tester is too old to hear or see anything or whne he walks into the bathroom or simply a weaker minded woman that can't hold under pressure from the students and lets them copy. It happens quite frequently and it is very disappointing and irritating.

to sum up, I believe you you got my idea about those tests. I believe that in order to have a better measurement of comparison there should be a single big test that touches a wide variety of subjects and copying or cheating would result jail time. A similar idea would be the pshcymetri which is quite succesfull on filtering the weak and giving the tuly strong students many options.

Task #1

Dear Magazine,

As a guy who likes both the sports and has never been until now 'forced' to choose between one of them, I believe both of them are great. Interesting, entetaining and enjoyable at the same time.

However, I can easily see that both of them have disadvatages and advatages. In fact, most of the time, the disadvatages of one are the advatages of the other.

I'd like to begin with the advatages of individual sports. Individual sports can often be more appealing to people who are new to sport thanks to the ease in wich they can start take part in them- Tennis, Ping Pong, Swimming etc. are very simple sports and take very short time to study. The other big advatage to invidiual sport is that either you succeed or fail, there is no one to blame but yourself. In other words, you are the one to be responsible for you own destiny and future. It can end up very well but it can also end up pretty disappointing- that depends on you.

The advantages of Indicidual Sports are the disadvatages of Team Sport. For example, say you want to get involved with a whole new kind of sport which includes a team, you will have to do tests and be accepted by this team, it will also take a lot of time to study that sport and for the occasional athletes, it is much tougher to play team sports such as basketball and football in a public court than go swim by yourself in the wimming pool. I would have to mention an important feature in team sports- they are much more fun than individual ones. You share a team of members that eventually become your friends. Much more fun to play, laugh and succeed with friends than on your own.

to sum up, I have mentioned the advantages of both these sports. I believe there is no 'better' sport. Those different types of sports suit different types of players. I personally believe that team sports are more enjoyable while invidual sports are more accesible.

Kdoshey Kahir 8 St.
Holon 16806
April 29, 2010

Columbia University Board
8 Goerge Washington St.
New York, NY

Dear Sir/Madam,

My name is Tyler Durden, I am a fresh high-school graduate,(New sentence) I am mostly interested in pshycology and medicine in general. My wish is that before I begin with my studies, I just want to take a short and fun course on the subject (phr. - I would like to take a short course in psycology before beginning my studies) in order to fell(ww.) the actual learning experience.

I believe you wonder(gr.) why it is your university I am applying to. Well, I have heard many positive compliments(ww.) about the learning enviroment in the classes as well as the excellent staff. In addition, I have many friends currently studying there, (New sentence)I honestly feel I can contribute to the great enviroment surrounding your school and gain from it as well.

An issue I would like to mention concerns the actual class and topic. I would like to know more about the course you are offering. Who is teaching it, what is the subject it focuses on and more.

To sum up, I am really looking forward to start my studies here at your University. I am also expecting an answer from you as soon as possible, we wouldn't want all the open spots in the course to run out. Would we?(phr. - not appropriate in a formal letter)

Truly Yours,

Tyler Durden

I am sure you can do much better than that.

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Daphna

(8 Kdoshei Kahir st.
Holon)
April 22, 2010


See the World Travel Agency
(Street name and number)
(New York, NY)


Dear Sir/Madam,
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Before I begin with the questions, I feel it is appropriate to introduce myself. My name is Tyler Durden, I currently live in Holon and plan to go on a trip with my girlfriend. I am 24 years old and work as an officer in the IDF army. I barely have any traveling experience, although I have been abroad quite a few times in my life. I have never actually traveled and went on 'adventures' abroad.

My interest, as you could have already understood, are mainly focused on adventurous trips that include walking, camping and basically connecting with nature. I believe that South America is an excellent option as well as the Far East. Those 2 places are the reason I am writing this letter. I have no clue or even a smallest detail(מיותר) on what is going on in these places. I believe you, as a CEO of a company designed to know such information, can help take the right decision and plan the perfect trip.
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Another issue for me is the costs. I, along with my partner, have recently begun our lives. As you can imagine, we are very limited concerning the amount of funds we can invest in this trip. I strongly suggest you to take this issue into consideration when handing in your offer.
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To sum up, I am very excited and looking forward to your reply. I have great expectations from this trip and I believe that with your company's helping hand, my partner and I will be able have an awesome trip.

Yours,
Tyler Durden

This is better. Well done.
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Daphna

Fubar Ryan

19 Sokolov St.
Holon
April 8th 2010



Station Manager
The Voice of Israel'
1 Mote Gur St.
Holon

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter because I wish to suggest a program which I though(sp.) of. I tend to call it 'The Lottery'. I believe this program has the potential to become(gr.- of becoming) a hit among teenagers around the ages of 15-17.

The program basically consists of a regular lottery in which a few songs are chosen out of hundreds. Each day there will be a different exclusive genre played. Every week will be dedicated to a different specific genre. For example, Sundays will play 'KISS' and Mondays will play 'Queen' and so on. The specific songs will be chosen by a lottery so every song has an equal chance for being played.

The program will make teenagers listen to it because of their expectations that their songs will be chosen. If not, they still have a wonderful full hour of listening to new songs and deepen their knowledge in music. The program will be delivered with some sense of humor to sweeten the listening experience even more. I believe this program can be educational as well. The broadcaster will explain throughout the program what happened to the specific band between different albums and educate the listeners about using drugs and how harmful they are (How are drugs related? You need to explain the connection).

That is pretty much my idea of the one-hour long program you plan. I am really looking forward for a program like this and I am sure it will attract many teenagers if managed well.

Sincerely Yours,
Fubar Ryan

I like it.
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Daphna

Trip

The Gadna's week purpose is to show what is waiting ahead for those 11th graders once they become 18 and join the army. Approximately 270 students from 11st classes(the 11th grade), and me between(ww.) them, went on to experience a once in a lifetime week. During those days we did a variety of actions, starting with cleaning the toilet and the kitchen and ending with firing a couple of rounds with the M-16 rifle. I can say in confidence that I wouldn't trade this experience with nothing(ww.).

We left school at the very morning of Sunday(phr.), heading for the camp located in Sde Boker, Negev. It couldn't be possible not to feel the exciement around the other students and the teachers as well. We, the students, fed ourselves up with enormous expactations and suprisingly we didn't get disappointed(phr.).

By the time we arrived, the commanding officer had introduced us to the staff and the base. We were divided into groups of 20 and started our week right after then(ww.). During that week we did(ww.) a wide variety of actions(ww.). We cleaned the kitchen and the toilets, did some running, made friends with the COs, talked about IDF's casualties all along the wars and on top of the(מיותר) that, we shot 11 rounds with the M16 "arocch" rifle. This was one of the best weeks I have ever had in my whole life.

To sum up, this experience has truly been remarkable. I've come to meet and befriend with students I've never seen before in my school and other students from other schools as well. I did get the general ideas aobut(sp. and ww.) what the army is all about and I feel I'm more preapred for it. Final thing to say(phr.), to all those young guys who are reading this- don't allow yourselves to miss this remarkable and unique week for nothing(phr.).

Not bad, for someone who hasn't actually been there....

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Daphna.

A letter of complaint

Where is the beginning of your letter? adress, date...?


(Dear Sir/Madam,)
I am writing this letter because I wish to complain about the poor and unsatisfying service I received in your hotel. The service I recieved completely contradicts all your promises according to your site and advertisements.

I would like to begin with the rooms and the meals. The second I entered my room I was astounded. The blankets were misorganized(ww.) and the toilets didn't smell clean, the TV didn't work well and the airconditioner pulled out heat(phr.- what do you mean?) instead of cold. I felt like the whole world was crashing on top of me. It was in this hotel that I finally realized the saying "The higher your expactations are the more you get(ww. - are) disappointed". I would also like to mention the meals. They weren't as bad as the rooms, but they weren't as good as what you led me to believe.

The second thing I would like to relate to in this letter is convincing me that your hotel was something more than what it really was. Deep in my heart I have the feeling I was literally conned by your website and advertising. I was led to believe completely diverted and untrue facts about the hotel.- what is your point in this paragraph?

To sum up, I feel I was disgraced and misled by you and your staff. I demand an immediate refund delivered to my account. Nowadays, I am seriously thinking over(ww. - about) taking legal actions against your hotel. Be advised, I am not planning to stop here and it's not the last time you'll hear from me.

Sincerely yours,

Kobi Tav

Better, but there are still a few problems, mainly in your phrasing. Please go over it again.

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Daphna